First Cut Feedback

Yesterday we showed our teacher and the rest of the class the first cut of our production. Then after showing the class our production we would receive feedback showing us how to improve it. Before the showing we knew what the main things we needed to change and we can re-shoot and edit again to keep on improving the production so we can achieve a higher grade. The feedback we got for our production was as follows, the comments in brackets are my ideas to how we could improve on the feedback given:

Holding shot steady- Unsteady shot on train, need to cut away or superimpose other shots. (We know we have to re-shoot this as not only is the shot not steady but the lip syncing isn't very good)

Framing a shot- Vary shot height, use this to represent characters mood (We can use high or low angle shots to show that he is the underdog.

- More dramatic shot after lyrics "got my cloak and dagger". (We could possibly cut to another shot using sharp, up tempo editing)

Appropriate Material- Make shots of leaving station and walking along bleak streets more interesting. (Going to re-shoot on Monday, better location etc)

- A reaction shot when he wins the money (could use different angles to show emotion?)

Selecting Mise en Scene- Staircase shot; not attractive (make the shot shorter)

- Build more of a storyline (use of flashbacks of him before the poker game)

Editing for Meaning- On the train need a more dramatic shot as the electric guitar kicks in (Possibly flash forward to what his life could be like after he has won the money)

Use of sound with images/editing- Lip syncing needs to be improve (Re-shoot all lip syncing shots, emphasis words)

After looking at the feedback given, it shows that there is space for alot of improvement and I think that maybe using green screen could show our different skills.